三要素搞定小作文流程图(附范文)
雅思2016-03-10 16:04:28来源 : 点击:

 雅思小作文总共可以分成两大类,分别是数据类小作文和非数据类小作文。数据类小作文因为出现的比较早,大家基本上都知道如何下笔,而相较之下,比较晚“出生”的非数据类小作文,主要有流程图和地图题两类,大家时常会觉得难以下笔,今天我们就来聊聊流程图!

其实,流程图小作文要想得分,关键在于考生能否抓住三个要素:用词衔接手段时态和语态

 

【得分要素一:用词】

令众多考生抓狂的事情莫过好多单词不认识怎么写呀?

 

其实,要想解决这两个问题非常简单。

 

首先,如果读题后发现根本不知题目所云,连图表画的是什么都不知道的话,不要着急,我们可以去抓图表的大标题。因为大标题往往就是这个图的描述对象。因此考生根本无需知道大标题什么意思,只要往主体段中照抄,即XXX由几个步骤组成即可(置于主体段段首,作为总趋势)。

 

 

比如剑六的第三套题:

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由于题目中出现了silkworm, silk cloth, life cycle等词汇,很容易导致考生抓不住描述对象。其实,我们完全可以从流程图大标题下手,提炼出描述对象,至于能不能看懂,根本不重要。

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比如上图中的大标题“Life cycle of the silkworm”就是描述对象。
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production of silk cloth 也是描述对象。

 

提炼出描述对象后,在主体段第一句话直接写Life cycle of the silkworm consists of five steps.即可,这样一来便描述出了数据的总趋势,而题目要求明确提出“Summarize the information”,总结数据总体趋势。

 

其次,出现好多生词是正常现象,我们根本不需要知道第一个图中的moth,muberry leaf和larva是什么意思,只需要看出moth下了好多蛋,larva是吃muberryleaf长大的即可。至于下蛋,完全可以用produce这个动词来表示,而吃则用eat来表示。完全可以满足5.5分作文的要求。

 

【得分要素二:衔接手段】

高分作文与低分作文最明显的一个差别就是低分作文很少使用连接手段对主题段内句与句进行连接。因此,大量而准确的使用连接手段,是提高分数最快的途径之一。就流程图而言,所谓的连接手段则是要在主体段内标明步骤。

 

表明流程图步骤的连接词和连接短语现总结如下:

 

第一,第一步:Firstly, to begin with, in the first step, in the first place

第二,第二步:Secondly, next, at the second step, after that

第三,下一步:Thirdly, at the next stage, then

第四,最后一步:Fourthly, at the final step, lastly, finally

 

以上几种连接手段用于步骤与步骤之间的衔接和过渡,在流程图中使用,可以帮助考生提高段落内部的连贯性,使文章的层次感更加分明。

 

得分要素三:时态和语态

低分作文在时态语态方面经常误用。流程图小作文主要分为两种,一种是动植物生命周期,比如上面的第一幅图,还有一种是某种产品的加工工艺,比如上面第二幅图。不管哪种类型的流程图,在对过程进行描述时都不会牵扯到过多的时态问题,因此我们多用一般现在时。

 

而对于动植物生命周期的语态来说,动植物生命循环一般都是源于自身生长规律,比如蚕会自己生长、吐丝,然后破茧而出。这个过程不需要借助外力,因此这类图多用主动语态,但也要注意随机应变,比如蛋是被蛾子排出来的,这类情况下要用被动语态。对产品加工工艺这类图而言,一定是人为进行的生产和加工,必须借助外力,产品不会自己生产出来。因此这类图多用被动语态,

 

优秀范文赏析(一)

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The diagram shows the stages in the process ofmaking chocolate.

(所有的小作文第一句话都要用一般现在时。流程图必备三个词:process:整个过程, stage:阶段,step:步骤)

 

Chocolatecomesfrom the cacao tree, which is grown in parts of SouthAmerica, Africa and Indonesia.

(开头不能冲上来就直接介绍cacaotree,而是通过主题词chocolate引出,否则显得太唐突)

 

The tree produces large red pods which contain whitecocoa beans. Firstly, when the pods are ripe,they areharvested, the beans are removed and they are fermented for several days inlarge wooden boxes.

(三个句子的并列:“句子A,句子B and句子C”。)

 

During the fermenting process, the beans turn brown.

(流程图特点之五:要 适当地添加个别图中没有交代但能从图片中直接读出来的的一些内容,否则可能达不到字数要求。但是一定要把握尺度,千万不要加上自己的主观观点,否则会扣分)


Next,the brown beans are spread in the sun to dry. They arethen put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry. After this, the beans are taken toa chocolate factory where they are roasted in an oven at temperatures ofbetween 250 and 350 degree Celsius.

 

After beingroasted, the beans are crushed and the outer shell is removed. This part is notneeded for making chocolate. Finally, the inner part of the bean is pressedand liquid chocolate is produced.

 

优秀范文赏析(二)

Brick manufacturing

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The process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which was just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.

 

Then the lumps of clayare placed on a metal grid in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller areas, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segre gates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make ahomogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut intobrick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter.

 

Those fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200 ℃-1300℃. This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.

 

Once the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.

 
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